All My (Les)Sons - I did one!

Hi,
In today's lesson, Ellie kindly allowed us to use her (very promising) essay to assess in the light of the assessment criteria. I hope that this was a useful exercise, and promoted thought from you all about how you can craft your essays to meet the expectations of the criteria most effectively. To summarise, some of the key points that came out of the lesson were about the importance of having a clear and straightforward structure to your responses- this can often be helped by having a clear and straightforward title. Furthermore, we considered the importance of writing developed, clear points, which analyse the evidence in detail. There is a tendency at this level to try to include too many points, resulting in a rather jumbled and incoherent response. Instead, rememeber the ideas about writing a 'lot about a little'.
I need to see a first draft from the rest of you by Monday- email it to me beforehand or bring it to the lesson please. Those of you who have chosen not to submit an essay title to me as requested on a previous post will have to write your essay without the opportunity to discuss the title with me. This is not helpful for you, and I'd remind you of the importance of responding to requests made in class or on the blog.
Anyway, have a great weekend,
Mr Boulter